poetry critique
Regarding “Band Practice”
My friend Samantha says;
“It’s a good sonnet, but I’m afraid I couldn’t quite relate it to my own band experiences. Not much romance for me.”
The sonnet is not autobiographical at all. And I am so flattered if anyone thought so!
I originally was imagining some young jock- but my technical advisor says that you can’t get anywhere near the bleachers when you’re in a game (Nothing I would know about) but a band member possibly could.
Something else I’ve noticed, is that the poem has several technical wobbles- a bad rhyme (wore and hair) and seriously limping meter, especially in the last three lines. But nobody has said a word about them- not even my mentor, whom I expected to come down on me like a ton of bricks.
That means it’s right as far as the emotional appeal of the thing goes. But- is it good enough to submit to “The New Yorker”, for instance? How do I find out, I wonder?
