dear inexperienced lesbian sex writer;
You need to work on the erotic aspect of erotica.
A grudge fuck between two women can be sexy and gritty and hot. But your sex scene is perfunctory, unimaginative and inaccurate– and not much erotic, not even in a dark way. Do you know what happens when a pissed off butch slams you down on her "huge strapon?" The damn thing is a hunk of silicone and she cannot feel where it’s going in your cunt. It ain’t so much about coming hard and wonderful, it’s about screaming in agony as your bladder ruptures, or your cervix bruises. Seriously, a real cockswoman would do it differently, even if it’s a grudge fuck.
link here– warnings; may be triggering to those of us who need coherent sentences or actual character development– I do not for one moment believe this writer is female, much less a dyke. I know plenty of crap women writers, but their crap is distinctly differently stenchy than this. An object lesson.
Ah, now I really do believe you have a thing for pain.
Merry Christmas!!
it’s a special kind of literary masochism!
Ah, now I really do believe you have a thing for pain.
Merry Christmas!!
it’s a special kind of literary masochism!
Ah, now I really do believe you have a thing for pain.
Merry Christmas!!
it’s a special kind of literary masochism!
I’m afraid to click. Incoherent sentences drive me to distraction.
I’m afraid to click. Incoherent sentences drive me to distraction.
I’m afraid to click. Incoherent sentences drive me to distraction.